A workshop draft does not have to look 100% done by any means. It can be full of errors and misspelled words. The main point is to just get all your words down on paper. It doesn't have to be perfect, you just need to get your thoughts down! Write whatever you are thinking. The audience is really for whoever you are writing the paper for, such as your teacher, and who ever is workshopping it for you. Your final draft should look different. It should be error free with sentence variation and sophistication. The audience should be geared towards whoever you are writing the paper for and not your workshopping group!

For EssayR I would advise him to use more sophisticated language and more sentence variation. The other major problem I saw was that he needs to use more sources to prove his points. More sources would help the paper so much. It would make it more professional and reliable.